Falling, Burning, Slitting
– disfigured to be scathed
Buried to the core,
To be trapped, drowned or bound.
Through the hazy clouds of comfort,
Sun and moon flicks through.
Cursed for the
Perpetuity of immobility.
Never to be jolted up
By the essence of fear.
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Party at dVerse. Bring your quadrille or taste ours.
To the nice people at dVerse, A burning question. What’s so special about the quadrille that bought itself a permanent place on dVerse’s schedule?
Part of my #The100DaysOfPoetryLearning project.
Original Picture from Unsplash.
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Fear does that. Your piece brought to the fore my own experience of fear. Very descriptive piece, Jeren. There, I got your name right. 🐯
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Haha, you did it! Thank you for the kind words, Imelda! I’m glad you visited.
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Those hazy clouds of comfort can really keep us imprisoned. You said this very well, in a lovely poetic way 🙂
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They are my worst enemy! Thank you so much for visiting!
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It seems that being jolted by the essence of fear may be a good thing keeping one from immobility. Victoria knows more about the history of the quadrille. I have been here less than a year. I like the quadrille and combine it with some version of common meter to get a metrical sound. One week for this potentially metrical poem and then the next with the haibun which is more prosaic.
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That through didn’t occur to me, I would try to do some metrical quadrille. Thank you for visiting, Frank. It’s a pleasure.
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I like to be mobilized by fear rather than paralyzed by it. Good question about the quadrille – Like Victoria (she and I are both members of the staff). we at dVerse occasionally refresh ourselves. I think Bjorn Rudberg came up with the 44 words as a way of keeping things short without limiting line numbers. There was a suggest of 33, 66, etc but 44 won out. We like it!
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Bjorn is great and the quadrille too. Thank you for the kind response and feedback. I’m glad you liked it.
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Imprisoned, it would seem–a world of fear-protection. Ugh.
To answer your questions about the Quadrille as best I can, there have been other memes out there that used word limitations. One of them was quite popular, asking for exactly 55 words. He “retired” his prompts. Two years ago we were looking for something to refresh dVerse which has been around since 2011 and has seen team members come and go. We decided to come up with something that had the connotation of a dance and the Quadrille fit the bill. Because it is so popular we have kept it, along with the Haibun which we initiated at the same time. Before that we were using Monday’s for Interviews or bios about famous poets but those were not as participative or popular. We try to keep things fresh and interesting. Hope this explains it. My own thought on the quadrille–writing to a give number of words like 44 helps writers of all sorts to write tight without to many fluffy, unnecessary words. Guess my response doesn’t adhere to this too well!
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Thank you so much for your amazing response and kind feedback. I understand now and I am starting understand why quadrille and Haibun are famous as they are. But what piqued my interest is ‘bio and interview of famous poets’. It sounds wonderful, I wish it could be done too.
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The interviews were of dVerse poets. They were fun. Both were fun but we went for something everyone could join in on. Thanks for the input.
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Oh! I understand now, a wise choice indeed.
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I just like saying “perpetuity to immobility” .. it has such a musical ring to it … but heaven forbid more than just saying it!
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Haha! Thank you.
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Ohh I love that twist—to be immobile forever because you don’t have fear. That really makes one change the way they see fear.
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Some fears are just a wake up call, some are red light while some are irrational and irritating! Thank you for reading!
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The lack of fear as a curse of immobility- great take on the prompt!
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Thank you so much! Fear I think, many times, can make us feel alive!
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Visceral imagery here….
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Thank you so much
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